On Thursday, I received very strong and helpful feedback
from the other members of my workshop group. I had a few grammatical errors
that are very easy to gloss over by yourself and I am glad they were caught by
the peers reviewing the paper. Another common critique that I receive is
repetitive wording and being a little wordy at certain points throughout the
rhetorical analysis. These are important as they can bore the reader and cause
them to lose interest and I am glad they were caught during this review
process. Additionally, I will attempt to go more in depth with connections to
UK as this is the true focus and there are moments where I lose sight somewhat
of this focus. I also plan to provide greater examination of the artifact from
the Department of Education as it wasn’t quite clear what it is and how it
pertains to the issue. Another option is to provide a photo of this artifact
which may increase the audience’s understanding. Although it wasn’t really
mentioned as a critique, I believe that my conclusion is somewhat weak as I was
trying to get it finished and rushed it to an extent leading it to be somewhat
unclear. Overall, I am grateful for the feedback I received as it is virtually impossible
to complete a strong paper without the input of others who may be more prone to
see your mistakes and help correct them. In the coming days, I will carefully
edit my paper and ensure that my best work is exhibited in the finished product
to be submitted on Tuesday.
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